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10/7/2013

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Posted by BJ
A respected colleague and fellow proposal professional sent me the following piece of content. This is for a response by a company that provides transportation. The name of the company has been changed to protect the incompetent.)
Terrific Transport believes each day begins and ends with compliance. Your members’ safety is our number one priority and we will make the safety culture part of the call center and our relationship with each transportation provider. We will not compromise on safety and we will guarantee that safety will be the number one priority of Terrific Transport in the operation of the contract. Terrific Transport is committed to leading the way to world class safety. Through the dedicated efforts of every team member and programs designed to lead subcontracted transportation providers, Terrific Transport has become known as the safest and most reliable passenger transportation service in the world. Terrific Transport has many safety programs that are geared to making safety a visible and daily part of all of our operations. The Terrific Transport safety program is discussed at length in Section 7 of the proposal response.
​As you can see, it is stated numerous times within this piece of content that safety is important to Terrific Transport. Too bad there is a single piece of evidence that demonstrates that the customers’ members will be transported safely and/or that safety is important to Terrific Transport.
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Jon
3/25/2016 02:53:05 pm

Thanks to the couple of you who pointed out a typo in the original version of this post! Duly corrected :-)

Guess it comes down to what we wrote a while ago about proofreading. The blog here, as with most forms of social media, is something we view as being pretty spontaneous and informal. As such, we don’t apply the same standards of editing and proofreading as we would to, say a proposal or a conference presentation. But we do always feel a bit frustrated when the odd error creeps in, and thanks to those of you who pointed it out!

And it’s always lovely to know that people read the entries so carefully though to the end…!

Jon & BJ

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