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Travelling light

10/22/2012

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Posted by Jon
​It’s pretty fundamental if you want to write a great proposal that you identify the real message you want the readers to remember, and to put it across succinctly. I read an inspiring example recently of a business who’d done precisely that with their writing – albeit in a different context – and thought you might enjoy it.

NetApp, a data management company, used to have a 12-page corporate expenses policy. They’ve just re-written it. Into three lines:
‘We’re a frugal company. But don’t show up dog-tired just to save a few bucks. Use your common sense.’

​So, which is more likely to actually get read in full – the twelve pages or the one paragraph? Which is going to be more memorable? If only more proposal writing used such a ‘
common sense’ approach…!
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John E. Bredehoft
3/25/2016 03:12:10 pm

There is a certain subset of people who will strongly object to NetApp’s new corporate expenses policy, saying that it is “obviously” substandard. The supposed lack of standards means that different employees could (horrors!) interpret the policy in different ways. If someone drives to an off-site in a subcompact car, and someone else drives to an off-site in a compact car, presumably the entire world will come crashing down.

Perhaps the greatest so-called problem with this policy is that it does not allow for robust capture of metrics to allow process improvement. What are you supposed to do – measure the number of yawns from an employee during the first full day at a remote location?

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